{"id":17380,"date":"2014-08-18T00:01:54","date_gmt":"2014-08-18T07:01:54","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/danoday.com\/blog\/?p=17380"},"modified":"2014-08-18T10:55:05","modified_gmt":"2014-08-18T17:55:05","slug":"radio-copywriting-winners","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/danoday.com\/blog\/2014\/08\/radio-copywriting-winners\/","title":{"rendered":"WINNER OF THE RADIO COPYWRITING REWRITE CHALLENGE"},"content":{"rendered":"<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><a href=\"http:\/\/danoday.com\/maximum-impact-radio-advertising\/\"><img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"aligncenter wp-image-17383 size-full\" src=\"http:\/\/danoday.com\/blog\/wp-content\/uploads\/2014\/08\/lift_up_celebration_400_clr_6364.png\" alt=\"how to write radio commercial\" width=\"325\" height=\"400\" srcset=\"https:\/\/danoday.com\/blog\/wp-content\/uploads\/2014\/08\/lift_up_celebration_400_clr_6364.png 325w, https:\/\/danoday.com\/blog\/wp-content\/uploads\/2014\/08\/lift_up_celebration_400_clr_6364-243x300.png 243w\" sizes=\"auto, (max-width: 325px) 100vw, 325px\" \/><\/a>Recently I issued a <a href=\"http:\/\/danoday.com\/blog\/2014\/08\/radio-copywriting-challenge\/\">challenge for radio commercial copywriters<\/a> to improve upon a weak line that appeared in an otherwise well-written print advertisement for Trader Joe&#8217;s. <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">A bunch of people <a href=\"http:\/\/danoday.com\/blog\/2014\/08\/vote-best-radio-copywriting\/\">submitted their copywriting rewrites (here)<\/a>.<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">The line to be rewritten was the second of these two sentences:<\/span><\/p>\n<blockquote><p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">\u201cTrader Joe\u2019s Sublime Ice Cream Sandwiches came to fruition after months and months of tasting and re-tasting by our panel. (Yes, it\u2019s a messy job, but we\u2019re pretty sure we\u2019re up to the task.)\u201d<\/span><\/p><\/blockquote>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Entry #4, submitted by Daniel Y, garnered the most votes from readers.<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">All the entries, naturally, were brilliant. <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Here are the finalists, this time with my own notes.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #1<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Denny Mattern<\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">The results were unanimous, but like any hung jury, they kept reviewing the evidence.<\/span><\/em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> The joke is funny, but it&#8217;s too subtle.<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">My own style of humor is deadpan and depends upon a brief pause while the other person &#8220;gets&#8221; what I&#8217;m actually saying.<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">But in a radio commercial, the audience can&#8217;t freeze time; the commercial continues regardless of whether it&#8217;s momentarily lost the listener&#8217;s attention. <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Also, the use of &#8220;hung jury&#8221; is confusing. (I&#8217;ll pause while 5% of you guys make your own crude joke about the use of that term.)<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">The way it reads, the panel was &#8220;like any hung jury.&#8221; <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">But a hung jury is one that cannot agree on a verdict. I&#8217;m guessing, therefore, that Denny&#8217;s intent was, &#8220;But they kept reviewing the evidence despite their unanimity.&#8221;<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">The joke in Denny&#8217;s version is that they kept reviewing the evidence, even though there was no reason to do so (other than to keep eating the ice cream). &#8220;Hung jury&#8221; confuses and thereby weakens the joke.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #2<\/span><\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Blaine Parker<\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">The panelists tasted like crazy, enduring countless hours rolling on the floor with ice cream headaches so we could bring you the single most lucious ice cream sandwich ever.<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> Uncharacteristically, Blaine waffled*. On the one hand, we have &#8220;tasted like crazy&#8221; and enduring ice cream headaches. On the other hand, we end up with &#8220;most luscious ice cream sandwich ever&#8221; &#8212; an advertising claim that begs the response, &#8220;Really??&#8221;<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">(*No, that&#8217;s not a sly reference to &#8220;waffle cones&#8221; or to the origin of the ice cream cone.)<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Several people referred in some way to the phenomenon of &#8220;ice cream headaches.&#8221; I&#8217;m not opposed to using it; it certainly does intersect common human experience, which is something I teach &amp; preach.<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">But &#8220;headache&#8221; is a reaction many people (including, alas, myself) often have to ice cream. It&#8217;s a mistake to remind people of that association when trying to sell ice cream. <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">See Entry #5 for a better way of using this.<br \/>\n<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #3<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Dan Gaffney<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Afterwards we had to buy pants with a bigger waist size\u2026but it was sooooo worth it!<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> Funny, but for many people &#8212; certainly including Trader Joe&#8217;s health conscious customers &#8212; choosing to eat ice cream = choosing to ignore their desire not to get fat (or fatter).<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">If someone were to say, &#8220;Here, eat this ice cream. You&#8217;ll immediately gain 3 pounds, but the it tastes SO good\u2026.&#8221;<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Most likely you&#8217;d say, &#8220;No, thanks.&#8221;<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #4<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Daniel Y.<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">\u2026months of tasting and re-tasting by our panel. Yes, we have such a panel and no, we\u2019re not hiring.<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> Excellent. The wording is elegant. It takes us in an unexpected direction with a funny pay-off that doesn&#8217;t slow down the commercial.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #5<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Monica Ballard<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Yes, we knew the risk of brain freeze, but dammit, people \u2013 this is SCIENCE!<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> I like the punch line. <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">The line is funny by itself. But it doesn&#8217;t move the commercial along. The story momentary stops with the punchline, as indicated by the strong (and appropriate) emphasis on &#8220;SCIENCE!&#8221;<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #6<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Michael G. Stanton<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Yes it&#8217;s a messy job&#8230; But we wore bibs &#8230;and (damnit) we LOVE ice cream sandwiches!<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> &#8220;But we wore bibs&#8221; is funny and quick. <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">It would&#8217;ve been stronger without the &#8220;we love ice cream sandwiches&#8221; coda, which didn&#8217;t make it any funnier and didn&#8217;t strengthen the sales message.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #7<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Patricia Napolitano<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Yes, it&#8217;s a messy job but we were wearing waffle bibs.<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> As I recall, both of Patricia&#8217;s entries were inspired by Michael&#8217;s (which is within the rules of this competition).<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">I don&#8217;t know what a &#8220;waffle bib&#8221; is\u2026or is supposed to be. Remember, when you confuse the listener, you derail the commercial.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #8<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Patricia Napolitano<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Yes, it&#8217;s a messy job &#8230; that&#8217;s a job?<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> That&#8217;s kinda funny. But it doesn&#8217;t lead to the next part of the commercial, which sells the product. Instead, everything comes to a halt.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #9<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Terry Stevens<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">(and more than a few ice cream headaches for those who did their tasting just a bit too quickly. Looking at you, Joe.)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> Same problem I mentioned earlier re: &#8220;headaches.&#8221; <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">&#8220;Just too quickly&#8221; takes the story off course.<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">&#8220;Looking at you, Joe&#8221; is funny\u2026but eats up (no pun intended) too much time.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #10<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Adam Garey<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Yes, it&#8217;s a messy job but we get paid by the scoop!<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> Points for originality, but it doesn&#8217;t move the story along.<br \/>\n<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #11<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Kathy Lepak<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">It was a messy job, and we all gained 12 pounds.<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> Again, it&#8217;s best to avoid saying, &#8220;Buy our product and get fatter.&#8221;<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #12<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Chris Miler<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">It was a messy job, but our employees found it very -&#8220;full-filling.&#8221;<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> Kinda cute. But puns are really dangerous in radio commercials, and this one doesn&#8217;t further the sales message; it&#8217;s simply a pun.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">ENTRY #13<\/span><br \/>\n<span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Mike Bratton<\/span><\/span><\/h2>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><em><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Yes, it was a rough job, but our taste-testers wear stretch pants for a reason.<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\"><strong>Dan&#8217;s Note:<\/strong> Of all the entries that worked the &#8220;gain weight&#8221; angle, this did it the most humorously. <\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">But it still points out &#8220;fat&#8221; in relation to a product for which &#8220;fat&#8221; is an unfortunate byproduct that no one wants.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 style=\"text-align: center;\"><strong><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">And The Radio Commercial Copywriting Rewrite Winner Is&#8230;<\/span><\/strong><\/h2>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">I agree with the popular vote winner: Entry #4 (Daniel Y).<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">I had planned to award the winner $5,000 in cash, but because Daniel Y didn&#8217;t further identify himself, I have no choice but to go out and enjoy a box of Sublime Ice Cream Sandwiches in Daniel Y&#8217;s honor.<\/span><\/p>\n<p><span style=\"font-size: 14pt;\">Congratulations, Daniel Y, and thanks to everyone for your contributions.<\/span><\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>Recently I issued a challenge for radio commercial copywriters to improve upon a weak line that appeared in an otherwise well-written print advertisement for Trader Joe&#8217;s. 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